Toledot minus epilogue

toledot/content/launch/sys/Ioan/005.tex

@@ -41,7 +41,7 @@ She nodded. ``Composer, conductor, violinist. Have you heard any of my stuff?''
 
 Ey waved the comment away. ``I'm here to listen. Please, obsess all you like.''
 
-Renee smiled gratefully. ``There really was nothing in my life, otherwise. Writing, playing, conducting. Concert after concert after concert. No friends, no family, no other hobbies, no other addictions. What would I even do with myself without the few things in my life I loved? Really, truly loved, too. I loved my parents, but it was more of a theoretical love. I told myself I loved my husband, but when he left---I was too distracted, he said---I was actually sort of relieved.''\pagebreak
+Renee smiled gratefully. ``There really was nothing in my life, otherwise. Writing, playing, conducting. Concert after concert after concert. No friends, no family, no other hobbies, no other addictions. What would I even do with myself without the few things in my life I loved? Really, truly loved, too. I loved my parents, but it was more of a theoretical love. I told myself I loved my husband, but when he left—I was too distracted, he said—I was actually sort of relieved.''\pagebreak
 
 ``That's a plenty good reason to upload, I'd say. 2140s, hmm.'' Ey hunted through eir memory, back to interviews with Douglas. ``That was before governments were paying people to upload. Was it expensive for you to upload?''
 
@@ -51,7 +51,7 @@ Renee smiled gratefully. ``There really was nothing in my life, otherwise. Writi
 
 ``Weird, weird. No, it was not expensive, but I did have to pay. Couple thousand francs CFA, I think?''
 
-``I don't have a reference point for that amount. I was compensated---well, my family was---to upload, coming to about two years tuition at the university. In terms of what the average person made where you lived, was that a lot?''
+``I don't have a reference point for that amount. I was compensated—well, my family was—to upload, coming to about two years tuition at the university. In terms of what the average person made where you lived, was that a lot?''
 
 She shrugged. ``Not sure about an average person. It was about six months' saving for me, and musicians didn't make a ton of money.''
 
@@ -65,7 +65,7 @@ She shrugged. ``Not sure about an average person. It was about six months' savin
 
 Ioan laughed. ``Of course. That makes sense. Did your music change after you uploaded?''
 
-``I wrote a lot more string works,'' she said, grinning. ``After all, I could fork and play as many parts as I wanted. Or could afford, at least. It still cost a bit to fork back then. I also made a few instruments up here that I could only describe in order to let phys-side know how to make. Concerts were much easier to have, because schedules are easier to coordinate when you're not restricted to just one version of yourself. Music started to drift between sys-side and phys-side---stylistically, I mean. I got some iffy reviews of stuff offline that went over pretty well here.''
+``I wrote a lot more string works,'' she said, grinning. ``After all, I could fork and play as many parts as I wanted. Or could afford, at least. It still cost a bit to fork back then. I also made a few instruments up here that I could only describe in order to let phys-side know how to make. Concerts were much easier to have, because schedules are easier to coordinate when you're not restricted to just one version of yourself. Music started to drift between sys-side and phys-side—stylistically, I mean. I got some iffy reviews of stuff offline that went over pretty well here.''
 
 ``What happened to music phys-side that didn't here?''