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 ``If you had to boil down this year into a sales pitch, what would it be?''
 
-I laughed and bump my shoulder against Hanne's. ``A sales pitch?''
+I laughed and bumped my shoulder against Hanne's. ``A sales pitch?''
 
-``Yeah,'' she said, leaning briefly against me as we walk. ``I'm in the market for a new year. Sell me the 2399 model. I've got a wide variety to choose from, so tell me why you decided to live through this one.''
+``Yeah,'' she said, leaning briefly against me as we walked. ``I'm in the market for a new year. Sell me the 2399 model. I've got a wide variety to choose from, so tell me why you decided to live through this one.''
 
 ``You're a nerd. You realize that, right?''
 
@@ -40,7 +40,7 @@ It was my turn to laugh. ``Whatever.''
 
 She snorted and shoved me away from her. ``Now who's the nerd? Gross.''
 
-I stumbled to the side, laughing. Our own champagne from earlier added a pleasant freedom of movement I only ever notice at two drinks. Any more and I become too loose and have a hard time staying upright. Any less and I don't notice that any freedom was lacking.
+I stumbled to the side, laughing. Our own champagne from earlier added a pleasant freedom of movement I only ever notice at two drinks. Any more and I become too loose and have a hard time staying upright. Any less and I don't notice that any freedom had been lacking.
 
 ``Is that so bad?'' I asked. ``Alternatively: am I not allowed to be a bit maudlin? It's fucking New Year's, Hanne.''
 
@@ -50,7 +50,7 @@ I stumbled to the side, laughing. Our own champagne from earlier added a pleasan
 
 She tilted her head at me.
 
-````Extremely sentimental,'' it says. Pretty sure that fits.''
+``\,`Extremely sentimental', it says. Pretty sure that fits.''
 
 Hanne rolled her eyes, grinning. ``Okay, yeah, that fits you to a tee.''
 
@@ -70,7 +70,7 @@ I shrugged. ``Fine, I guess. The Western Fed was swinging conservative again, it
 
 ``2320 something. I don't remember. I think I was under ten, at least.''
 
-I nodded. ``I guess that's what I mean by sheltered. We were already up in Newfoundland. Summers sucked, winters sucked, but it was alright between them.''
+I nodded. ``I guess that's what I mean by sheltered. We were already up in Newfoundland. Summers sucked, winters sucked, but it was alright between them. It was worse when we lived in New York.''
 
 ``Autumn or spring?''
 
@@ -118,7 +118,7 @@ The shadow of her shoulders relaxed again in the dark of the night. ``Even after
 
 ``Is that why you forked, too?''
 
-I grinned. ``I forked for fun. Even if it's still a tender spot, I think I'm still way more relaxed than they are. There may be a bit of that in Tule, I guess. He's still pretty happy being a guy — he's the only one out of all of us, come to think of it. Rush is as ve is of ver own choice, though.''
+I grinned. ``I forked for fun. Even if it's still a tender spot, I think I'm still way more relaxed than they are. There may be a bit of that in Tule, I guess. He's still pretty happy being a guy — he's the only one out of all of us, come to think of it. Rush is as ve is of vis own choice, though.''
 
 Hanne looped her arm through mine. ``Well, I still like you as you are.''
 
@@ -136,7 +136,7 @@ Hanne looped her arm through mine. ``Well, I still like you as you are.''
 
 ``Oh, right. I guess I knew that.''
 
-She shrugged. ``Sure. But either way, they were somewhere in the middle, maybe. There was this big push from the liberal side on the climate, and this big push on the conservative side on the financial side. They said they could cut costs on services if there were fewer of us. Dad was with them, mom was with the libs. It was one of the few things they could agree on. They said they'd miss me, but they weren't exactly sad when I went the Ansible.''
+She shrugged. ``Sure. But either way, they were somewhere in the middle, maybe. There was this big push from the liberal side on the climate, and this big push by the conservatives on the financial side. They said they could cut costs on services if there were fewer of us. Dad was with them, mom was with the libs. It was one of the few things they could agree on. They said they'd miss me, but they weren't exactly sad when I went the Ansible.''
 
 ``\,`Went the Ansible'? Is that what you called it?''