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@@ -63,7 +63,7 @@ She shrugged. "I do not think that that is a requirement here, though that quest
 
 Ioan sat back in eir chair, arms crossed as ey mulled it over. If she was right --- and ey suspected that she was --- then there would likely need to be a change in form and a change in name to go along with the change in attitude. After all, that's how Zacharias had gotten as far as he had, right?
 
-Ey couldn't picture her as anything other than a skunk or perhaps whatever version of Michelle she remembered, though, and certainly couldn't picture her named anything other than True Name. Would she also have to change her speech patterns? They weren't totally identifiable, but now that ey thought about it, even Zacharias had shared many of them. She was an Odist through and through --- more so than any other ey'd met --- and all of the forking and reinforcing that May had done to cement behavior and thought patterns didn't seem like something that she'd willingly undergo, either.
+Ey couldn't picture her as anything other than a skunk or perhaps whatever version of Michelle she remembered, though, and certainly couldn't picture her named anything other than True Name. Would she also have to change her speech patterns? They weren't totally identifiable, but now that ey thought about it, even Zacharias had shared many of them. She was an Odist through and through --- more so than any other ey'd met, if such a thing was possible --- and all of the forking and reinforcing that May had done to cement behavior and thought patterns didn't seem like something that she'd willingly undergo, either.
 
 But perhaps that's what she'd meant by a sliver of a plan. They still had plenty of time to sort that out, at least, and perhaps she'd come up with a way that would actually work without changing herself so much that she'd cease being who she was.
 
@@ -139,7 +139,7 @@ Ey watched her think. Watched her and thought about how much ey loved her, watch
 
 "Do you want to?"
 
-May started from her own reverie. "Hmm?"
+May started from her reverie. "Hmm?"
 
 "Regardless of the mechanics or how comfortable you are with it, is this something you'd even want to do?"
 
@@ -163,7 +163,7 @@ Shortly after they went back inside to pull together a snacky sort of lunch, Tru
 
 The skunk nodded for her to continue.
 
-"You have mentioned in the past that you forked to cement emotional patterns that led to your divergence. I think that I have wound up doing that to some extent, but only ever subconsciously. With how much specificity were you able to pick what it was that you were modifying?"
+"You have mentioned in the past that you forked to cement emotional patterns that led to your divergence. I think that I have wound up doing that, myself, to some extent, but only ever subconsciously. With how much specificity were you able to pick what it was that you were modifying?"
 
 May glanced to Ioan, then shrugged. "I worked in very small steps. I forked dozens of times to change very small things. Being deliberate about it made it essentially as fine-grained as I needed."
 
@@ -171,7 +171,7 @@ May glanced to Ioan, then shrugged. "I worked in very small steps. I forked doze
 
 "That's actually what we had been talking about," Ioan said, looking to May for confirmation that it was alright to continue.
 
-"A deliberate merge," she said, picking up from where ey'd left off. "One that will keep us comfortable in our privacy while also giving you the opportunity to build upon what you are."
+"A deliberate, selective merge," she said, picking up from where ey'd left off. "One that will keep us comfortable in our privacy while also giving you the opportunity to build upon what you are."
 
 "Really? That is not what I was expecting to hear."