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@@ -134,7 +134,7 @@ May grinned. "And all will be as it should."
 
 There was a long silence as Sasha finished brushing out her tail and spent a few minutes simply staring across the lake, perhaps mapping the opposite shore and marking spots for future exploration.
 
-Finally, she said, "I think that I will be. I am of three minds and will ever be such. I will have moments of happiness, moments of sadness and terror and regret, but they will ever be in thirds."
+Finally, she said, "I think that I will be. I am of three minds and will ever be such. I will hate myself, sometimes, and I will love myself, too. I will have moments of happiness, moments of sadness and terror and regret, but they will ever be in thirds."
 
 "Are you okay with that?"
 
@@ -164,7 +164,7 @@ She laughed. "Of course. So many threats to hunt me down, these days. But yes, t
 
 "And if you do not watch me perform my monologue, I will trim your claws too short in your sleep," May said. "There is a monologue night coming up soon."
 
-"Far worse than being hunted down, that. I will be there."
+"Jesus, May. That is far worse than being hunted down. I will be there."
 
 May preened.
 
@@ -196,9 +196,9 @@ Ioan, Debarre, E.W., and Douglas took the time to set up the picnic, a rickety t
 
 "Are you feeling better now?" Douglas asked.
 
-She nodded. "I am leaning on the other portions of myself now. I will have much processing to do yet, but tonight is for dinner with friends, or at least with those I hope will be friends."
+She sniffled and nodded. "I am leaning on the other portions of myself now. I will have much processing to do yet, but tonight is for dinner with friends, or at least with those I hope will be friends."
 
-"I certainly hope we can be friends." Douglas laughed. "I mean, those are the first words we've ever really spoken to each other, but I'm happy to have the chance to meet you."
+"I certainly hope we'll be friends." Douglas laughed. "I mean, those are the first words we've ever really spoken to each other, but I'm happy to have the chance to meet you."
 
 "Or at least meet a third of me."
 
@@ -252,7 +252,7 @@ Barely a month after that dinner with Debarre and Douglas on the field, two of t
 
 May stumbled in the middle of a Wednesday morning rehearsal, falling to her knees, panting, before pushing herself to her feet. She managed to make it through the rest of the scene before forking off so that she could continue as best she could while her root instance ducked back home.
 
-Once there, she darted over towards where Ioan sat at eir desk, working through the process of writing Jonas's book. She knelt beside em, clutched a pawful of eir shirt and set up a cone of silence. Ey felt the ACL-scape of the cone shift several times until it was just about as secure as could be made.
+Once there, she darted over towards where Ioan#Trackers sat at eir desk, working through the process of writing Jonas's book. She knelt beside em, clutched a pawful of eir shirt and set up a cone of silence. Ey felt the ACL-scape of the cone shift several times until it was just about as secure as could be made.
 
 "May? What--"
 
@@ -414,7 +414,7 @@ Sasha nodded. "I understand."
 
 "Wait, what?" Ioan said. May edged around a little ways behind em, clutching at eir arm.
 
-"You are too entangled in the matter. No contact with this situation means no contact from you, May Then My Name Die With Me, or E.W. *né* Do I Know God After The End Waking. This request is in effect until further notice, and applies to our stanzas on Castor and Pollux as well, where Dear, Also, The Tree That Was Felled will be presented with the same request. None of us are on Artemis, but I will also be passing this on to Sorina Bălan. This includes general intraclade communication; we will add visibility exceptions to our messages and request that you do the same."
+"You are too entangled in the matter. No contact with this situation means no contact from you, May Then My Name Die With Me, or E.W. *né* Do I Know God After The End Waking. This request is in effect until further notice, and applies to our stanzas on Castor and Pollux as well, where Dear, Also, The Tree That Was Felled will be presented with the same notice. None of us are on Artemis, but I will also be passing this on to Sorina Bălan. This includes general intraclade communication; we will add visibility exceptions to our messages and request that you do the same."
 
 "I understand, accept, and offer you my best," Sasha said, bowing once more.
 
@@ -486,4 +486,4 @@ She chuckled and elbowed em in the side. "This may be a True Name thing."
 
 "I don't even know what to think about that," ey said, shaking eir head. "It's kind of a lot."
 
-"That it is. You are a good person, though. You love your partner. She knows this. I know this. You are good to her and it will all be okay. We may hope for neat endings but all we get are more beginnings." She smiled, adding, "And yes, you may stay until she is feeling better."
+"That it is. You are a good person, though. You love your partner. She knows this. *I* know this. You are good to her and it will all be okay. We may hope for neat endings but all we get are more beginnings." She smiled, adding, "And yes, you may stay until she is feeling better."