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@@ -12,7 +12,7 @@ Ey shrugged, saying only, "It appears Codrin#Artemis has instructed the Artemisi
 
 "Yeah, haven't the faintest. Anyway, I'm not sure how you want to pass it over. I figured a separate sheet would be easiest and you can decide from there. The news from #Artemis seems mostly to be about the Odists, so perhaps that's what Turun Ka is getting. True Name has her own message in here." Ey nodded over to the skunk, handing her a separate sheet
 
-Both of the Odists, having claimed the other table in order to have their own hushed conversation quickly moved over to rejoin the other three. They all watched as ey frowned, nodded, and skimmed quickly over the letter addressed to em.
+Both of the Odists, having claimed the other table in order to have their own hushed conversation, quickly moved over to rejoin the other three. They all watched as ey frowned, nodded, and skimmed quickly over the letter addressed to em.
 
 Eir frown deepened. "Thanks. Here, hold on--" Ey quickly jotted *Message received, passed on, more soon, updates from others?* on a slip of foolscap and handed it to the other Codrin. "Send this for now, just so we're on the same page at as close to the same time as we can manage."
 
@@ -24,11 +24,11 @@ Codrin#Castor smirked. "Well, did it?"
 
 "Just have to pull harder, then." Ey sighed and shook eir head. "Self-deprecating humor aside, tell them I miss them."
 
-Ey nodded. "Of course."
+Codrin#Assist nodded. "Of course."
 
 "I'll see them soon enough, I guess. A few weeks, tops, though at this rate, I'm guessing only a matter of days. Tell--"
 
-"Mx. Bălan," True Name said, nodding to the writer. "Please come with us. We have only a few minutes to sort this out before we start, and if you are correct about Turun Ka receiving similar information, I would like to plan."
+"Mx. Bălan," True Name said, nodding to Codrin#Castor. "Please come with us. We have only a few minutes to sort this out before we start, and if you are correct about Turun Ka receiving similar information, I would like to plan."
 
 Ey shrugged to Tycho and Sarah and stood to follow the two Odists to True Name's partitioned rest area. Codrin#Assist stepped from the sim and back to Castor proper.
 
@@ -36,7 +36,7 @@ Ey shrugged to Tycho and Sarah and stood to follow the two Odists to True Name's
 
 "Best guess? More about how they're struggling with the time skew over there. Maybe something specific happened, and that's why everybody's gotten messages all at once."
 
-He nodded, sighed, and rubbed over his face with a hand. For as little as was actually happening, he was incredibly tired. Conferences were always like this, felt like.
+He nodded, sighed, and rubbed over his face with a hand. For as little as was actually happening, he was incredibly tired. Conferences were always like this, it seemed.
 
 "Well, neither of us got anything, and it's not worth speculating, especially since I figure we will learn soon enough," she said. "I'll start to sound like a broken record before long, but how are you feeling about how things are going?"
 
@@ -56,7 +56,7 @@ Sarah laughed. "Well, okay. I'll grant you that. Sounds like working with her ha
 
 "She didn't exactly come off as kind or polite in there, no."
 
-"Codrin mentioned something about that, about how they wanted the *History* released but wanted to control how. Ey said that she'd acted as dramatic as she had in order to make the end result seem more sensational than realistic. "Shaping the narrative," she called it."
+"Codrin mentioned something about that, about how they wanted the *History* released but wanted to control the outcome. Ey said that she'd acted as dramatic as she had in order to make the end result seem more sensational than realistic. "Shaping the narrative," she called it."
 
 Sarah laughed. "Well, I'd certainly call *that* subtle."