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@@ -8,7 +8,7 @@ And, once he was able to talk without the volume of his voice continually rising
 
 "It's alright," he had said, laughing tiredly. "It's always night in the field. It's always night outside, isn't it?"
 
-This left Codrin and Dear to sit in silence for a few minutes. After making coffee, they moved out to the patio despite the chill of the morning.
+This left Codrin and Dear to sit in silence for a few minutes. After making more coffee, they moved out to the patio despite the chill of the morning.
 
 *"What do you think, my dear?"* the fox asked, cradling its mug close to its chest.
 
@@ -22,19 +22,19 @@ Dear laughed. *"You jumped out of bed so fast I thought that we were under attac
 
 "Probably not."
 
-They sat in silence, drinking their coffee, and watching the sun creep up until the horizon reluctantly let it free. When they realized that they were squinting and shading their eyes too much to actually see anything, they went back inside to claim the couch, huddling under a throw to warm themselves up while Dear's partner puttered sleepily around the kitchen.
+They sat in silence, drinking their coffee and watching the sun creep up until the horizon reluctantly let it free. When they realized that they were squinting and shading their eyes too much to actually see anything, they went back inside to claim the couch, huddling under a throw to warm themselves up while their partner puttered sleepily around the kitchen.
 
-This led, of course, to second cups of coffee and warm sweet rolls, and a long hour of Codrin and the fox catching their partner up to date.
+This led, of course, to further cups of coffee and warm sweet rolls, and a long hour of Codrin and the fox catching their partner up to date.
 
 "Well," they said. "How do you feel?"
 
 *"That is a very Codrin question."*
 
-"Yeah, I guess it is. I feel..." Ey paused, looking down into eir coffee. "I feel overwhelmed. I guess that's not a complete emotion, though."
+"Yeah, I guess it is. I feel..." Ey paused, looking down into eir mug. "I feel overwhelmed. I guess that's not a complete emotion, though."
 
 "You want help teasing it apart?"
 
-Codrin slouched down into the couch further, resting the coffee mug on eir stomach. Tiredness clung to em in a thin, sticky film. "I guess. I mean, I think a lot of it is due to exhaustion."
+Codrin slouched down into the couch further, resting the mug on eir stomach. Tiredness clung to em in a thin, sticky film. "I guess. I mean, I think a lot of it is due to exhaustion."
 
 *"Seconded,"* Dear mumbled. *"I am surprised you slept through that, my love."*
 
@@ -74,7 +74,7 @@ Codrin hesitated, taking a sip to gain a bit more time to mull that over in eir
 
 "Ten times?" Dear's partner frowned. "A hundred times the size of *On the Perils of Memory?*"
 
-"Size maybe isn't the best descriptor. Intensity, perhaps?" Ey shrugged. "Working on the Qoheleth project never had me screaming into the void or shouting at the sky. The *History* was longer, but while I can see this one being perhaps shorter, the intensity is going through the roof. I'm not sure how much of that is just being exhausted, though."
+"Size maybe isn't the best descriptor. Intensity, perhaps?" Ey shrugged. "Working on the Qoheleth project never had me screaming into the void or shouting at the sky. The *History* was longer, but while I can see this one maybe being shorter, the intensity is going through the roof. I'm not sure how much of that is just being exhausted, though."
 
 *"That is about the work, though. How do you feel about the topic? Aliens sending us copies of Douglas? Or perhaps us sending aliens copies of...well, whoever we decide?"*
 
@@ -112,7 +112,7 @@ Ey waggled a hand. "Tense is maybe too strong a word. We were both excited, and
 
 *"Then May Then My Name tainted em in turn."*
 
-"I miss them," Dear's partner said. "I can't imagine seeing them together would be anything but adorable."
+"I miss them," their partner said. "I can't imagine seeing them together would be anything but adorable."
 
 *"Saccharine, even."*