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@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@ After their 'deaths', such as they were, Dear cackled madly and ran about the st
 
 Dear's partner also laughed, hopping to their feet and chasing after the fox in a drunken dash, leaving Codrin to sit and smile and watch and think.
 
-There was no more Codrin in the L<sub>5</sub> System. Ey was only here. Ey couldn't remember being there, for were the sims not the same? And if ey had never been there, had ey ever really existed there? Ey was only memories, and perhaps that is all ey had ever been. Navel gazing and existential crises mixed with the glee of having actually *done* something. No longer just the passive amanuensis, but now the active participant.
+There was no more Codrin in the L<sub>5</sub> System. Ey was only here. Ey couldn't remember being there, for were the sims not the same? And if ey had never been there, had ey ever really existed there? Ey was only memories, and perhaps that is all ey had ever been. Navel gazing and existential crises mixed with the (admittedly drunken) glee of having actually *done* something. No longer just the passive amanuensis, but now the active participant.
 
 Or, well, nearly so, for it was Dear who talked em into this, as it was so good at doing.
 
@@ -168,6 +168,6 @@ The finality of the word brooked no argument, and Codrin left it at that. "I'll
 
 Dear laughed and wriggled itself closer against Codrin leaving space for its partner when they would inevitably crawl back to a real bed.
 
-*"Do you think the Codrin on Pollux did the same?"* Dear mumbled.
+*"Do you think that Codrin on Pollux did the same?"* Dear mumbled.
 
 Ey was awake only enough to say, "I hope so."