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@@ -44,7 +44,7 @@ Dear had been a lot today. Codrin had suggested that they do an interview togeth
 
 "There was more to the message than that, Dear. Maybe ey just wrote the same thing for both launches and sent it in one go."
 
-The fox had stared down into eir wide mug of coffee, a series of emotions crossing its face, before nodding. *"Yes, of course. I apologize, Codrin. I have been thinking about those stories since launch night, and the more I do, the less I want the actual reasons to wind up in some history book."*
+The fox had stared down into its wide mug of coffee, a series of emotions crossing its face, before nodding. *"Yes, of course. I apologize, Codrin. I have been thinking about those stories since launch night, and the more I do, the less I want the actual reasons to wind up in some history book."*
 
 Codrin had laughed, sipping eir own coffee. "I understand the impulse, believe me. I'm not even sure *I* know your reasons."
 
@@ -96,7 +96,7 @@ Ey sat before the cairn so that it came up to eye level, and watched the long, s
 
 Perhaps it was regret or guilt, perhaps not. The fox had attacked the idea of leaving, of truly leaving the L<sub>5</sub> System and leaving no fork behind, with a ferocity that even Dear's partner admitted was somewhat unusual, as though it had *needed* to leave, to escape something.
 
-And then it's story, building an ascetic cult until it had been killed by its followers. Did some of that ring true to the fox? Did it feel that it had a cult following? Did it feel as though there were some risk of being destroyed by the thing that it had built up? Did it feel like an ascetic who had taken too many liberties?
+And then its story, building an ascetic cult until it had been killed by its followers. Did some of that ring true to the fox? Did it feel that it had a cult following? Did it feel as though there were some risk of being destroyed by the thing that it had built up? Did it feel like an ascetic who had taken too many liberties?
 
 "I'm overthinking this," ey mumbled.
 
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 The fox very carefully set its wine glass down. Codrin noticed that it's paw had begun to shake. *"Did you go looking?"* it asked.
 
-Ey blinked, startled at the change of its demeanor. "No. You said the 2130s, and I had no reason to doubt you. Should I have?"
+Ey blinked, startled at the change of its demeanor. "No. You said the 2130s, I just did a quick search at the time to confirm and I had no reason to doubt you. Should I have?"
 
 *"No, of course not."*
 
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 "Yes. I left it up to Dear to tell you. It's always been tight-lipped about that."
 
-*"It is there for anyone to look up, but most who look it up do not seem to care very much, or find it simply a curiosity."* It hesitated, then added, *"It is also particularly difficult to look up for reasons that I will not go into now."*
+*"It is there for anyone to look up, but most who look it up do not seem to care very much, or find it simply a curiosity."* It hesitated, then added, *"It is also particularly difficult to look up for reasons that I will not go into now, but that is why you found the date that you did."*
 
 "So you were there for Secession? For the L<sub>5</sub> launch?"