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@@ -82,7 +82,7 @@ True Name nodded, smiling, and gestured for em to continue.
 
 "Thanks for confirming my suspicions." Ey quelled the desire to add an *I suppose* before continuing, "My next topic is getting a sense of how you feel about the launch. I understand that you helped with much of the early stages of planning, and I'm wondering, do you consider it a success? How do you feel about the speed and ease with which it came together?"
 
-"I very much consider it a success. Many sys-side were on board with it, and those who were not simply did not care. Those phys-side were quite eager to work with us with, only a very small minority who were not.
+"I very much consider it a success. Many sys-side were on board with it, and those who were not simply did not care. Those phys-side were quite eager to work with us with only a very small minority who were not.
 
 "As for your second question, I think that that was largely due to this being the first time in nearly two centuries that our two groups have worked together on one goal in any meaningful way. Scientists sys-side consulted with those phys-side on the design of the launch struts and arms. Many sys-side focused on providing a set of goals to be accomplished by the launch, and many phys-side focused on the design of the System replicas, solar sails, and the Dreamer Module."
 
@@ -100,7 +100,7 @@ Ey chuckled at the suggestion. "I suppose it is a little silly, but then, much o
 
 "I have heard mixed responses on this from the clade, but do you consider yourself a Hadje still?"
 
-True Name sighed, looking genuinely saddened. "No, not any longer. Sometime between Secession and her death, I had diverged too far from Michelle. The last time I merged back with her, it was quite difficult to rectify those conflicts."
+True Name sighed, looking genuinely saddened. "No, not any longer. Sometime between Secession and her death, I had diverged too far from Michelle. The last time I merged back with her, it was quite difficult to rectify those conflicts, I imagine."
 
 "I understand. I apologize for interjecting, though. Do you have further thoughts on Douglas Hadje working phys-side?"
 
@@ -126,7 +126,7 @@ Codrin nodded as ey wrote, and some part of em realized just how smoothly the co
 
 "What was your role in the decision to undertake the launch project?" ey asked.
 
-She blinked, sat up straighter, and smiled wide. "Oh goodness, did you not know? It was mine from the start. Before she left, Michelle met with the clade and gave each of the stanzas a suggestion. They were quite vague, as she was struggling quite a bit, there at the end. She said, "Do something big. Do something worthy of us." And so I gave it some thought and remembered that it had been so long since the two entities had worked together on a project, and we are already in space, so the idea of Launch came naturally to me."
+She blinked, sat up straighter, and smiled wide. "Oh goodness, did you not know? It was mine from the start. Before she left, Michelle met with the clade and gave each of the stanzas a suggestion. They were quite vague, as she was struggling, there at the end. She said, "Do something big. Do something worthy of us." And so I gave it some thought and remembered that it had been so long since the two entities had worked together on a project, and we are already in space, so the idea of Launch came naturally to me."
 
 Ey stopped writing in the middle of a sentence, startled. "Wait. You originated the idea?"